Redemption Road - Work In Progress! - Harmony Central Musician Community Forums

Sam McDonald · 11-04-2009, 04:25 PM

Hi,

One I'm working on at the minute. Just lyrics haven't got around to recording anything.

Kinda stuck, it came along pretty quickly as it is but I can't decide; does it need another verse, or a bridge, would the third verse work as a bridge, does it work?

Your thoughts/suggestions would be appreciated.

Thanks.

Redemption Road

Lookin’ for Redemption Road
Can I ask you please
Lost the thread, the path , the way
A little direction’s what I need

Tryin’ to find that peace of mind
There’s a weight upon my soul
If I could lay this baggage down
If I could only let it go

It’s the punches you don’t expect
From a friend or in the dark
They’re the ones that bruise the skin
They’re the one’s that leave their mark

So I’m lookin’ for Redemption Road
If it really does exist
Just a hand, a touch, a face
I really need to find that place.

Boydog · 11-04-2009, 05:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sam McDonald

Hi,

One I'm working on at the minute. Just lyrics haven't got around to recording anything.

Kinda stuck, it came along pretty quickly as it is but I can't decide; does it need another verse, or a bridge, would the third verse work as a bridge, does it work?

Your thoughts/suggestions would be appreciated.

Thanks.

Redemption Road

Lookin’ for Redemption Road
Can I ask you please
Lost the thread, the path , the way
A little direction’s what I need

Tryin’ to find that peace of mind
There’s a weight upon my soul
If I could lay this baggage down
If I could only let it go

It’s the punches you don’t expect
From a friend or in the dark
They’re the ones that bruise the skin
They’re the one’s that leave their mark

So I’m lookin’ for Redemption Road
If it really does exist
Just a hand, a touch, a face
I really need to find that place.

needs a good chorus and/or bridge

rockinrobby · 11-04-2009, 06:45 PM

Agree, although almost none of my songs have a bridge! But I just finished writing one that actually does have a bridge? I usually go verse chorus verse chorus, same ol same ol.

easilyspooked · 11-05-2009, 07:31 AM

if you were to use that fouth 'verse' as a 'chorus', then you might consider writing 3 more verses for v v v c v v v c c

Sam McDonald · 11-07-2009, 01:50 AM

Thanks folks for the feedback.

Boydog & Rockinrobin - It doesn’t feel like a v c v c sorta song to me but I do agree with you it does need a good bridge. I had one written, but it was crap so I scrapped it!

Easilyspooked - I do kinda like that idea I will definitely give that some thought.

More work to do obviously, in the mean time put a rough recording down to show where I’m starting from.

Redemption Road -http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8321519

11-04-2009, 04:25 PM	#1
Sam McDonald Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Belfast, Northern Ireland Posts: 58	Redemption Road - Work In Progress! Hi, One I'm working on at the minute. Just lyrics haven't got around to recording anything. Kinda stuck, it came along pretty quickly as it is but I can't decide; does it need another verse, or a bridge, would the third verse work as a bridge, does it work? Your thoughts/suggestions would be appreciated. Thanks. Redemption Road Lookin’ for Redemption Road Can I ask you please Lost the thread, the path , the way A little direction’s what I need Tryin’ to find that peace of mind There’s a weight upon my soul If I could lay this baggage down If I could only let it go It’s the punches you don’t expect From a friend or in the dark They’re the ones that bruise the skin They’re the one’s that leave their mark So I’m lookin’ for Redemption Road If it really does exist Just a hand, a touch, a face I really need to find that place.

11-04-2009, 06:45 PM	#3
rockinrobby Member Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Atlanta Posts: 297	Agree, although almost none of my songs have a bridge! But I just finished writing one that actually does have a bridge? I usually go verse chorus verse chorus, same ol same ol. __________________ www.reverbnation.com/rockinrobby

11-05-2009, 07:31 AM	#4
easilyspooked Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: northeast Posts: 401	if you were to use that fouth 'verse' as a 'chorus', then you might consider writing 3 more verses for v v v c v v v c c __________________ The Genre Whores - You Are Compelled To Listen! Do Not Question! http://www.myspace.com/genrewhores Ibanez AK85 - Boss Blues Driver - Crate Vintage Club 50 310 1985 MIJ Squier Telecaster, 1959 Gibson Melody Maker, Martin DXK2 Koa-HPL Acoustic, Ibanez GTR 4 String P-Bass knockoff Hey Pope Video

Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Email this Page
Display Modes
Linear Mode Switch to Hybrid Mode Switch to Threaded Mode

11-07-2009, 01:50 AM	#5
Sam McDonald Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Belfast, Northern Ireland Posts: 58	Thanks folks for the feedback. Boydog & Rockinrobin - It doesn’t feel like a v c v c sorta song to me but I do agree with you it does need a good bridge. I had one written, but it was crap so I scrapped it! Easilyspooked - I do kinda like that idea I will definitely give that some thought. More work to do obviously, in the mean time put a rough recording down to show where I’m starting from. Redemption Road -http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8321519