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thelonius74
06-09-2002, 10:32 PM
This is one I wrote a couple of months ago. I've got music to it, but haven't laid it down yet. The music and melody is a bit Beatles-esque.

Lemmee know what you guys think.








Jerry


I could trip over the sofa and I could land with a crash
And I could come in on cue when Shirley talks about trash
But you never seem to be so amused at the simple things.
And I’m trying to be in your eyes a man that I will never be

(chorus)

She thinks that jerry does it better than me
No matter what I do
So I write songs about nothing at all just to prove that I can do it too.

I never go into my kitchen when I’m that neatly dressed
And my neighbors still knock on the door as if they’re still guests
And I can’t believe that these are the reasons why you treat me so bad
And it’s not as if your fantasy is something you could even have

She thinks that jerry does it better than me
No matter what I do
So I write songs about nothing at all just to prove that I can do it too.

(bridge)
She even has his book next to shakespeare
As if it’s some work of art
And make me feel like Arthur Fonzerelli
Only after jumping the shark

(drum fade out /phone voice over verse melody)

I could repeat my sister’s name in agony and dismay
Or ask Willis to explain him self in my own peculiar way

But it looks as if I’ll have to win your heart in another way

(chorus)

Lord Lucifer
06-09-2002, 10:51 PM
hey man, I like those alot, very well written in my opinion. i think you get your point across very well too.

bigpooface
06-09-2002, 10:51 PM
not bad...

i'd like to hear the music over it, it's hard to judge lyrics i reckon without the music.

peer amid
06-09-2002, 11:08 PM
easier to form a mental image than most, i like the writing style (i don't know what the tech names are) you are very descriptive in the minds eye.....keep at it

devilboy
06-10-2002, 04:21 PM
Nice job, they bring the listener in very comfortably. Reminds me of Elvis Costello. Lets get those tracks laid and share the music with us too!

ninja of love
06-10-2002, 04:56 PM
She's right about Jerry, you know.

thelonius74
06-10-2002, 05:44 PM
Originally posted by ninja of love
She's right about Jerry, you know.

*in whiny voice* I KNOW!!! What is the deal?? Jewish guy gets his own sitcom and I'm sleeping on the couch! I don't get it! :)

rachigator
06-10-2002, 08:59 PM
Nice job! The lyrics are definitely fun! Almost satirical it seems... I'd LOVE to hear your music for it!